Sunday, February 20, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday - First Go Around

Six Sentence Sunday is a blog ring (no, not a chain letter - remember those?) founded and kept up by the Six Sentence Sunday blogger. Check it out, and visit the other participants!

My first post will be from my work in progress, YA dystopian/teenage assassin manuscript, LACED.

Images of the boy on the platform, of Andy, and the man in the tweed jacket play against my eyelids and I’m forced to open them again. By now the man is slouched over on a train to New-New York. No one will notice he’s dead until they stop, and round up the passengers up like cattle to force them through the security check point. By tomorrow the reports will say Chancellor Adkins died of a massive heart attack. No one will question the media, no one will think of me bumping into him, no one will wonder how a man of thirty-five died so young. It’s the beauty of the job, I guess.

That's it. Hope you enjoyed it.

31 comments:

  1. I really like the voice in this. Very intriguing snippet!

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  2. I love dystopia stories. I can't wait to see more of this!

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  3. Dystopian YA? Really? Sounds great.

    I do like the opening, but it makes me think of "the Train Job" episode of Firefly and "New New York" makes me think of Doctor Who.

    However, the story sounds great, and "New New York" is still a great concept.

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  4. Thanks everyone!

    @Casi - Thanks. I can't say I've seen either. Although isn't Firefly the show that had the hot guy from Castle on it? Maybe I'll watch! LOL

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  5. This is a great excerpt! I hope you continue to share more from LACED. Wow!

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  6. Very interesting post - and welcome! Looking forward to seeing more.

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  7. Love this, as I do the rest of the story. ;)

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  8. Love the voice in this. Great kick off for your Six Sentence Sunday foray.

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  9. Wonderful writing. Welcome to Six Sentence Sunday. Very auspicious debut!

    When I first read your description: "YA dystopian/teenage assassin manuscript," I thought, "nothing like narrowing it down, LOL!"

    I agree with the comment above: I love the voice.
    But having read the snippet, I see it.

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  10. I like him, even if he is a killer. Nice work!

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  11. @Dianneharstok LOL I never thought of it, but I guess I didn't say the killer is a girl. I hope ya still like her. :P

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  12. "YA dystopian/teenage assassin" That's a great combo!
    The setup is great & I'd love to see where it goes. Great six!

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  13. "I can't say I've seen either. Although isn't Firefly the show that had the hot guy from Castle on it?" Yes, that's it. And the movie Serenity came from the same series. It has a huge cult following now (says the cultee). And it's coming back to Science channel on March 6th if you want to see what the fuss is all about.

    Oh yes, on to your six. A YA with a female teenage assassin? Wow. Loved getting inside her head as she contemplates her victim.

    Great six. Welcome to SSS!

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  14. Very interesting concept. Great writing. I'd read more. ;)

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  15. Great six - and do come back we need to see more!

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  16. A little ambiguous, but I was guessing probably a female assassin (2nd guess would be a female approving of the job well done). Great six!

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  17. He (she?) sounds so dispassionate. But it's very intriguing. :)

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  18. Very cold and intriguing look into this killer. I'll be interested to see how he/she comes to life.

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  19. great job on the present tense, and I love the title :)

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  20. Very intriguing 6. Love the blog name btw. :)

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  21. Intriguing. I haven't gotten a chance to read Laced yet but I like what I've seen so far.

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  22. Yay you! Love getting to see Laced again. I miss reading it (takes out whip to make you get back to work).

    Great job lady!

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