Sunday, March 6, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday #3

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This SSS is an excerpt from another YAFF Muse short called THE JOURNEY. It's another magical realism this week, but not for YA. The dialogue is between a couple standing at a train depot on the verge of a major change in the relationship as well as their last journey together. You can see the full short story here.

“When we laugh, the train will go faster though we wish it wouldn’t. When we cry, it will slow though we wish it speed. We will scale mountains and plummet down the other side, but we will be together.”

“What if it breaks down?” I asked, tears cresting the corners of my eyes.

“Ah, and it might, but what’s a journey without a few breakdowns?”

Thanks for stopping by & I hope you enjoyed it!

25 comments:

  1. Wow. I really love your six this week, Miranda.

    ~Sarah

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  2. Very Cool. That last line is great!

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  3. what would life be without breakdowns...

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  4. Great Min. You continue to fascinate me with you talent. Hugs girl!

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  5. Very interesting use of symbolism

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  6. Indeed! That was very, very touching to me. Beautiful.

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  7. That last line is so totally awesome

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  8. Oh, sad and insightful at the same time.

    Great six!

    gem

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  9. Oh, I love that. There's magic in those lines.

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  10. Wonderful. Thank you for sharing :)

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  11. "Tears cresting" was a beautiful description! Very sweet six.

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  12. Well then.

    That is so metaphorical and meta.

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  13. I remember this Muse story and I remember that I LOVED it.

    (And psst...I left you some blogger-bling on my site...)

    ***Also? My word verification is rearthru...um, yeah...

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