Sunday, March 6, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday #3

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This SSS is an excerpt from another YAFF Muse short called THE JOURNEY. It's another magical realism this week, but not for YA. The dialogue is between a couple standing at a train depot on the verge of a major change in the relationship as well as their last journey together. You can see the full short story here.

“When we laugh, the train will go faster though we wish it wouldn’t. When we cry, it will slow though we wish it speed. We will scale mountains and plummet down the other side, but we will be together.”

“What if it breaks down?” I asked, tears cresting the corners of my eyes.

“Ah, and it might, but what’s a journey without a few breakdowns?”

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25 comments:

  1. Sarah GrimmMarch 6, 2011 at 6:14 AM

    Wow. I really love your six this week, Miranda.

    ~Sarah

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  2. Lisa FoxMarch 6, 2011 at 6:54 AM

    I love that last line!

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  3. Keri FordMarch 6, 2011 at 7:00 AM

    Very Cool. That last line is great!

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  4. Susanna FraserMarch 6, 2011 at 7:39 AM

    Intriguing concept!

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  5. AnonymousMarch 6, 2011 at 7:47 AM

    what would life be without breakdowns...

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  6. AnonymousMarch 6, 2011 at 7:58 AM

    Great Min. You continue to fascinate me with you talent. Hugs girl!

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  7. Jayel KayeMarch 6, 2011 at 8:37 AM

    Very interesting use of symbolism

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  8. Sandra SookooMarch 6, 2011 at 8:40 AM

    fantastic last line!

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  9. Rebecca RoyceMarch 6, 2011 at 8:42 AM

    Indeed! That was very, very touching to me. Beautiful.

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  10. Lindsay K.March 6, 2011 at 8:46 AM

    That was beautiful.

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  11. AnonymousMarch 6, 2011 at 8:59 AM

    Thoughtful and moving. Thank you.

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  12. LindsayMarch 6, 2011 at 9:39 AM

    That last line is so totally awesome

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  13. Chrystalla ThomaMarch 6, 2011 at 9:43 AM

    Really magical!

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  14. Jessica E. SubjectMarch 6, 2011 at 11:04 AM

    Beautiful!

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  15. Taryn KincaidMarch 6, 2011 at 11:22 AM

    Good metaphor!

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  16. Lauri J OwenMarch 6, 2011 at 11:22 AM

    So very sweet! Great six.

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  17. Gem SivadMarch 6, 2011 at 12:36 PM

    Oh, sad and insightful at the same time.

    Great six!

    gem

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  18. Marie DeesMarch 6, 2011 at 12:41 PM

    Oh, I love that. There's magic in those lines.

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  19. Patricia PrestonMarch 6, 2011 at 2:00 PM

    There be magic! Yay!

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  20. lexcadeMarch 6, 2011 at 2:29 PM

    Wonderful. Thank you for sharing :)

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  21. AnonymousMarch 6, 2011 at 4:51 PM

    "Tears cresting" was a beautiful description! Very sweet six.

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  22. Alanna CocaMarch 6, 2011 at 6:12 PM

    Awesome! Loved it

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  23. Pip GreenMarch 6, 2011 at 10:38 PM

    Sweet. :)

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  24. CasiMarch 7, 2011 at 5:56 PM

    Well then.

    That is so metaphorical and meta.

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  25. Cambria DillonMarch 9, 2011 at 1:31 PM

    I remember this Muse story and I remember that I LOVED it.

    (And psst...I left you some blogger-bling on my site...)

    ***Also? My word verification is rearthru...um, yeah...

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